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The Traveling City by JNIKEL The Traveling City by JNIKEL
Finished up a sketch from a while back.

From a story I've been writing on and off.

edit. Changed up the clouds.

edit. Overlayed some texture on the sky.
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Very cool! I like the idea behind the image. A very nice try on perspective.

+ Lively and clear colors. You've picked good colors that both harmonize but also creates contrast.
+ Original scenery. Although many have created islands in the sky, few have linked them together, and few have actually people in their illustrations.
+ Nice technique on the clouds - they look good and it's obvious that the clouds are created by the waterfall. Very nice.
+ Pretty little details indeed! The buildings, the stones and the earth is well drawn.

- Although the colors are lively, there aren't enough of the darker colors to create balance in the picture. The two front pieces of land that he jumps between are well drawn, but the one in the background doesn't have as much contrast. Therefor it looks rather... unbalanced. I understand the difficulty between making something look far away and still keep the texture of it - but I really think there should've been more defined and darker shadows on the big island.
- The anatomy of the boy is a little unnatural - the leg that's closest to us is thinner than the one far away, although the should be the same size.
- Folding of the shirt. A place that high up is sure windy. He's jumping between two little pieces of earth in the middle of the sky. I think you would've achieved the effect better with loose clothing. (and the folding on his stomach isn't totally correct either. they should be more on the side.)
- The sign in very small. If the boy would stand right up and down next to the sign, it would probably reach his stomach. That's a little weird.
- The wheel on the watermill isn't.. making any sense. With those kinds of blades it wouldn't be able to take up any energy from the water, so I suggest finding a ref for how a watermillwheel looks like and draw it like that. :)

But by all means, a scenery perspective like this is not very easy to draw, so I think it's an excellent job you've done here. Much better than what I would've been able to create. There's just tiny bits of details that are wrong, when looking away from the lack of contrast.
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Critique by MandieEllie Dec 20, 2012, 8:20:26 AM
I really like this idea! You did a fantastic job!

:star: The colours are beautiful and well picked
:star: Your detail is superb, grass, earth, buildings.
:star: This is very creative

Your colours, are wonderful, they are bright and lively. they just pop and draw the eye into the piece. The detail is fantastic the earth looks so real, and the grass is very well done. the way you created the buildings makes them unique. I like how you created the chain to connect the earth pieces. The waterfall turning into the cloud is a great idea! Your person really matches the scene well done.

Only thing to suggest is to maybe move it to the left a bit more, it just sort of cuts off part of the third island and takes away from the piece.
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Himitsu4Schuu Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
this beautiful deviation was featured here: [link]
AnimationMan19 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013
Indeed. Very nice artwork.
UraHameshi Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2012  Student Interface Designer
You did a great job with the details :)
CHOCOCHIYOKO Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student General Artist
The anatomy of the guy seems pretty off but I guess this is okay since he is cartoon. I think the perspective is sort of strange (its very abrupt) The clouds could be a little softer. The pose is also not great, it is very unnatural for someone falling/jumping, so maybe try looking at refs.
JNIKEL Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thanks! The buildings are just farther away :)
ms-laika Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012   Traditional Artist
Very funny little piece! I like how he seems so much bigger than the buildings! It reminds me of those old games in which you have to jump about a lot! You should really post more info to the story behind it. I'd be interested to hear it.
JNIKEL Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thanks! The buildings are just farther away :)
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